Upsettling

Curse you word and your irregular html! I'm far to lazy to go back through and re-italicize! Apologies!
SO, I need some assistance with the transitions and I want to know how YOU think it flows together. Also, help with the ending would be much appreciated!


Scene 1:
(A science class full of bored kids, they seem to be having a study time. The teacher- Ms. Blake- is at her desk and then Rebecca bursts in.)
Rebecca: (Yelling) I am here to save… you?
Audrey: What?
Rebecca: (Suddenly embarrassed) You’re obviously not being held hostage…
Audrey: Why would you think that?!
Rebecca: (Pulls out her phone and points to it.) You used the safe word.
Audrey: We have one of those? Wait! Why?
(Rebecca gives Audrey an exasperated look.)
Audrey: What is it?
Rebecca: Ubiquitous—duh!
Audrey: Why would you choose that? I use it all the time. You could say it’s ubiquitous in my vocabulary.
(A few groans are heard from various students and the Ms. Blake.)
Rebecca: You’re the only—
Ms. Blake: Ladies! Back to class!
(Rebecca squeaks and runs off stage.)
Ms. Blake: (grumbling to self.) Drama kids.
Audrey: I’m not a—
Ms. Blake: Detention!

Scene 2:
(Audrey and Byron are alone in front of a door.)
Byron: (Like a smooth criminal) What’d you get done for?
Audrey: I’m not a drama kid.
Byron: That’s disgusting. Defiantly the worst of all crimes. I’m surprised that you’re only being reprimanded here.
Audrey: What did you do?
Byron: None of your beesw-
(Ms. Blake walks between the two of them and unlocks the door.)
Ms. Blake: Right, smooth Mr. Arson-to-Be.
(They walk into the room and sit in chairs.)
Byron: Who said anything about to-be? (Ms. Blake glares at him) Gotcha! Say, is that a new haircut today, Ms. Blake? You’re looking sparklingly pro-mediocre.
(Audrey begins to dig in her bag.)
Ms. Blake: No homework!
Audrey: What are we supposed to do then?
(Byron looks at Audrey, surprised.)
Byron: Have you never had detention before? Or watched any high school dramas?
Audrey: I’m not really into tv.
Byron: (With a puppy dog face.) Not even from the 90’s?
Audrey: I keep hearing people defend the 90’s. What was so good about them?
Byron: Fresh Prince of Bel Air, Anamaniacs, Friends, not to mention Joss Whedon.
Ms. Blake: Fine! You can do homework, just shut up.
(Byron and Audrey get homework out and the scene changes…)

Scene 3:
(to Iwan and Audrey standing around talking. They are in a hall way and have lunch out.)
Audrey: Why is there a kidnapping safe word?
Iwan: Uh... You know. ‘Bec’s Columbian and paranoid.
Audrey: What!
Iwan: That was not mean in a racist way.
Audrey: How was it meant!
Iwan: Her neighbor was kidnapped by a drug cartel before she moved.
Audrey: And you chose ubiquitous?
Iwan: Neither of us talk good. Until you came along, I didn’t know the difference between an adverb and an adjective.
Audrey: (Sarcastically) And you have a very sold grasp on that.
Iwan: Thank you!
(Audrey face-palms. Rebecca enters with a tray of food.)
Rebecca: ‘Sup!
Audrey: Nothin’ much.
(Iwan squints at the two of them)
Iwan: You know when you say a word too many times, it stops sounding like a word?
(Audrey looks like she agrees. Rebecca starts giggling uncontrollably.)
Rebecca: Penis!
Audrey: This is why we can’t have company over.
Iwan: (Totally disregarding them) I had a four hour session with a model last night and now everyone looks funny.
Rebecca: (giggling) Iwan has a naked friend.
(Iwan blushes/looks embarrassed.)
Audrey: That’s it. I won’t tolerate this any longer. Becca, you’re in time out until further notice.
(Rebecca opens her mouth to argue but Audrey counter acts it with a stern look. Rebecca goes a ways away from them and turns her back.)
Iwan: He was a clothed model in case you were wondering.
(Byron enters from behind Iwan and slowly walks toward the group.)
Audrey: (Quickly) I invited Byron. I met him in detention, he’s really cool (Normal speed) Hey Byron! This is Iwan and that’s Rebecca. You’re not allowed to talk to her.
(Iwan hides behind Audrey)
Audrey: Iwan likes shows from the 90s and he plays piano.
Byron: You have sense, unlike Audrey.
Iwan: She doesn’t even know who Joss Whedon is.
Byron: What!
Rebecca: She said she was bored with the first ten minutes of Buffy.
Audrey: You’re still in time out!
Byron: I’m stealing your friends.
Rebecca: (To Audrey) We’re trading you in.
Audrey: Shoosh. You’d be at the mercy of your grandmother if it wasn’t for me.
(Rebecca frowns at this memory.)
Byron: Grandmother?
Audrey: (Nervous laughter.) I don’t know you well enough for that story. We should start on out essay…
(Rebecca lets out a massive groan.)
Byron: Is she alright?
Audrey: She’s not allowed to hit on anyone we have projects with.
Rebecca: The Great Debacle of Avery ’09. (Glaring at Iwan.)
Iwan: That was not my fault.
Rebecca: Yeah, I’m sure you just fell on his face.
Iwan: He came on to me! I though he was straight!
Audrey: Not while we have company! Do you want to go into time out too?
Iwan: No… Wait. Do you have classes together or did you just meet in detention?
Audrey: Good save. No, we’re both in Blake, different periods.
Byron: So…
Audrey: Right, productiveness!

Scene 3
(Rebecca stands, leaning against a locker, Audrey enters and walks towards her.)
Rebecca: How illegal is it to punch someone—no wait, like on a scale of one to permanent record?
(Audrey stands, staring at her for a while before heaving a sigh and leaving)
Rebecca: Wait! This is a totally serious question!
(Byron comes by, Rebecca waves him over)
Rebecca: You’re a delinquent, how illegal is it to punch somebody?
Byron: (Angrily) I set one thing on fire and now I’m a delinquent? (Cheerily) Sweet! Are we talking provoked or unprovoked?
Rebecca: Does having a stupid face count as provoked…. Ness?
Byron:… Sure. Where is this person being punched?
Rebecca: Parking lot, later.
Byron: I meant on their body.
Rebecca: In the lady-balls.
Byron: Is that breasts or (gestures downward)
Rebecca: The second one.
Byron: Minor assault and sexual harassment. I’ll see you when you get out of juvy.
(Rebecca huffs.)
Rebecca: Well, instead of that, we could, ya’ know, do something (waggles her eyebrows) else.
Byron: Right. Let’s.
(The two exit.)

Scene 4
(In a hallway, Rebecca is standing alone, searching the crowd for someone. Byron comes over. The two of them act flirtatious through the whole scene.)
Rebecca: Hello, big tiger.
Byron: I need some help.
Rebecca: Yeah?
Byron: Only you can provide it.
(Rebecca grabs Byron by his bowtie and drags him to an empty art room)
(Audrey walks on stage and stares at the place where Byron and Rebecca disappeared to.)
Audrey: That bitch! (Moderately muttering while pacing.) We have rules in place for a reason! She put them in place! The gall! I hate everyone!
(Iwan comes up behind her, sees that she’s talking and looks around.)
Iwan: Who are you talking to?
(Audrey jumps then wraps Iwan in a tight hug.)
Audrey: It’s not your fault honey! I swear!
(Iwan looks confused.)

Scene 5
(Rebecca and Iwan are talking In the hallway.)
Iwan: I notice that you’ve been sneaking around with Byron lately. Are you sure you want to violate that code?
Rebecca: Who are you to talk! You’re not Audrey! And Audrey isn’t my mom…
(Audrey enters)
Audrey: Yes! (Does a victory dance, the two others stare at her.)
Audrey: I’m the group’s mom! Try hitting on me now Rebecca! Try hitting on me now!
Rebecca: I… Um…
Iwan: You’re the group’s MILF.
(Audrey stops dancing and glares at Iwan.)
Audrey: You’re horrible. Also gay.
Iwan: (embarrassed) I just felt like it had to be said.
Audrey: So, what were you cool kids fighting about?
Iwan: Byron.
Audrey: Oh.
Rebecca: It isn’t what it looks like!
(Byron waves to Rebecca and Rebecca runs over to him and they run off stage.)
Audrey: I knew I was wrong to introduce such a criminal to this group.
Iwan: He set one thing on fire.
Audrey: One person.
Iwan: What!
Audrey: I was talking with Ms. Blake the other day, turns out, they were doing an acid reactions lab and he “accidentally” set Kemper Bailey’s hair on fire. They didn’t have enough evidence so he just got detention instead of suspension.
Iwan: I have no qualms with his being friends with us.
Audrey: Articulate.
Iwan: Oh shh.
Audrey: I’m not being sarcastic.
Iwan: Suuuuuuure. You got me off topic! Rebecca, what are you doing with Byron!?
Rebecca: (Unconvincingly) Nothing… I’ve got to go now…
Audrey: We’re talking about this later!
(Rebecca exits.)
Audrey: I have to go now too…
(Audrey begins “sneakily” tailing Rebecca. Rebecca meets up with Byron, they enter a closet. Muffled barking is heard. Audrey avoids the window and flings the door open. She shockedly, jumps back out of the closet.)
Audrey: You’ve been hiding a dog! Why!?













Surplus Scene! I don’t think this will fit in the play, but, I think it’s kinda funny.
(In the hallway, Iwan begins walking toward Rebecca.)
Iwan: Hey bro!
Rebecca: don’t bro me if you don’t know me! (She stomps away.)
Iwan: I’ve known you for ten years!
(Audrey walks up with Byron)
Audrey: What did you say to her?
Iwan: I don’t know! GOD! (Stomps off.)
Audrey: Has everybody’s menzies synced?
Byron: (Angrily) That’s so not PC!
Audrey: What are you talking about?
Byron: Sexism in the masses.
Audrey: Do you want to eat chocolate and talk about emotional problems?
(Byron bursts into tears, Audrey puts her arm around him.)
Audrey: I’m here. Shhh, let out your pc, hipster tears.
Byron: It’s so hard to be so politically defensive all the time.
Audrey: Aw, poor little hipster.
Byron: 50 million people in West Africa are being exploited for chocolate production where it’s a non-native species. It’s just not fair!

I like it for the most part, but a couple different issues. First off you have 2 scene 3s. It was also a little confusing at time as to what was actually going on. Finally, The scenes seemed really short, if you could string some of them together into on scene i think it would look better.